In my elevator pitch, this time I changed my location of filming and changed what I said. Last time I was a bit nervous and kept stumbling over my words so this time I tried to be better about that. I also made sure that it was a full 60 seconds this time. Other than that all the feedback I got, was very helpful and forced me to make sure I changed those things.
Sarah, It is good that you took feedback not only on the product but on the style of your delivery. Entrepreneurs often have to give presentations regarding their product; to potential investors as well as to interested buyers and customers. Being a good presenter will engage the audience and make them want to become involved. Good job! You can see my pitch here: http://katieshirley.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi Sarah, I really like your idea I know it's something that I could definitely use! I think you have a steady and clear voice and your key messages are clear. I think the next step to improving is to become more animated: purposeful hand gestures and facial expressions that emphasize what you're saying. Here's mine: http://lfrancie.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Great opening! A lot that I've seen have been pretty bland. I think this idea is really well though-out. Apps are definitely trending among college student entrepreneurs. I misplace my phone ALL the time so I would download this app. My only constructive criticism is to be a little more enthusiastic with your pitch (maybe by standing and hand gestures?). Great job though!
Your beginning was clear and let me know what your product would be. Your idea is great for people who lose their keys or cards very often or other uses they could be for. Instead of buzzing I think you should have it make a loud sound instead of a vibration would allow objects with your product be found even easier. I agree with Lizzette about being more animated next time with gestures and maybe even a prototype (doesn't have to work but a visual representation no less). While yours is a product and mine is a service, I believe both of ours provide the individual with a less stressful environment. If you would like to see my blog post, here's my link: http://thisisnotawkward.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Sarah,
ReplyDeleteIt is good that you took feedback not only on the product but on the style of your delivery. Entrepreneurs often have to give presentations regarding their product; to potential investors as well as to interested buyers and customers. Being a good presenter will engage the audience and make them want to become involved. Good job! You can see my pitch here: http://katieshirley.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi Sarah, I really like your idea I know it's something that I could definitely use! I think you have a steady and clear voice and your key messages are clear. I think the next step to improving is to become more animated: purposeful hand gestures and facial expressions that emphasize what you're saying. Here's mine: http://lfrancie.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteGreat opening! A lot that I've seen have been pretty bland. I think this idea is really well though-out. Apps are definitely trending among college student entrepreneurs. I misplace my phone ALL the time so I would download this app. My only constructive criticism is to be a little more enthusiastic with your pitch (maybe by standing and hand gestures?). Great job though!
ReplyDeleteYour beginning was clear and let me know what your product would be. Your idea is great for people who lose their keys or cards very often or other uses they could be for. Instead of buzzing I think you should have it make a loud sound instead of a vibration would allow objects with your product be found even easier. I agree with Lizzette about being more animated next time with gestures and maybe even a prototype (doesn't have to work but a visual representation no less). While yours is a product and mine is a service, I believe both of ours provide the individual with a less stressful environment. If you would like to see my blog post, here's my link: http://thisisnotawkward.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
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